Anapaestic interchanges of the trimetric kind (strictly adults only)

Started by Mark Hoffmann, January 06, 2018, 10:21:12 AM

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Dylan di Vilde

He put fifty-pence in her slot
her customers did that a lot
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Gyppo

He put fifty-pence in her slot
her customers did that a lot
it used to be more

Mark Hoffmann

He put fifty-pence in her slot
her customers did that a lot
it used to be more
if you used the back door 
Writing humour is the hardest thing since sliced bread.

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Dylan di Vilde

He put fifty-pence in her slot
her customers did that a lot
it used to be more
if you used the back door
now she doesn't mind who, where or what.
Read more of my poems in my new book - Rescued from Oblivion.  Available now at https://www.feedaread.com/profiles/10661/

Mark Hoffmann

Writing humour is the hardest thing since sliced bread.

The Severed Hands of Oliver Olivovich
UK - https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B087SLGLSL
US - https://www.amazon.com/dp/B087ZN6L6V

FB Author Page - https://www.facebook.com/Mark-Hoffmann-Writer-102573844786590

DGSquared

A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
"Outside of a dog, a book is man's best friend. Inside of a dog it's too dark to read." -Groucho Marx

A child's life is like a piece of paper on which every passerby leaves a mark. -Chinese proverb

Blondesplosion! ~Deb

Gyppo

A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
which flipped off the bumpers

Mark Hoffmann

A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
which flipped off the bumpers
got snagged in his jumper

Writing humour is the hardest thing since sliced bread.

The Severed Hands of Oliver Olivovich
UK - https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B087SLGLSL
US - https://www.amazon.com/dp/B087ZN6L6V

FB Author Page - https://www.facebook.com/Mark-Hoffmann-Writer-102573844786590

DGSquared

A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
which flipped off the bumpers
got snagged in his jumper
and caused the old codger to fall


I tried to think of something less boring but my muse has headed off to the wild, blue yonder.
"Outside of a dog, a book is man's best friend. Inside of a dog it's too dark to read." -Groucho Marx

A child's life is like a piece of paper on which every passerby leaves a mark. -Chinese proverb

Blondesplosion! ~Deb

Mark Hoffmann

Quote from: DGSquared on April 04, 2022, 08:45:12 PM
A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
which flipped off the bumpers
got snagged in his jumper
and caused the old codger to fall


I tried to think of something less boring but my muse has headed off to the wild, blue yonder.

Yeah, but the metre is perfect and there's lovely consonance too.  :)



Writing humour is the hardest thing since sliced bread.

The Severed Hands of Oliver Olivovich
UK - https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B087SLGLSL
US - https://www.amazon.com/dp/B087ZN6L6V

FB Author Page - https://www.facebook.com/Mark-Hoffmann-Writer-102573844786590

DGSquared

Quote from: Mark Hoffmann on April 05, 2022, 08:38:27 AM
Quote from: DGSquared on April 04, 2022, 08:45:12 PM
A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
which flipped off the bumpers
got snagged in his jumper
and caused the old codger to fall


I tried to think of something less boring but my muse has headed off to the wild, blue yonder.

Yeah, but the metre is perfect and there's lovely consonance too.  :)

Thanks, I think.  ;) :D

You can't go to all that trouble without starting a line! What's wrong with you? Wait. Don't answer that, You are just fine, :D Should there be a vodka ban?



NaPoWriMo poets were amiss


"Outside of a dog, a book is man's best friend. Inside of a dog it's too dark to read." -Groucho Marx

A child's life is like a piece of paper on which every passerby leaves a mark. -Chinese proverb

Blondesplosion! ~Deb

Mark Hoffmann

NaPoWriMo poets were amiss
no time for a snack or a piss.
Writing humour is the hardest thing since sliced bread.

The Severed Hands of Oliver Olivovich
UK - https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B087SLGLSL
US - https://www.amazon.com/dp/B087ZN6L6V

FB Author Page - https://www.facebook.com/Mark-Hoffmann-Writer-102573844786590

DGSquared

NaPoWriMo poets were amiss
no time for a snack or a piss.
They gathered catchy words
"Outside of a dog, a book is man's best friend. Inside of a dog it's too dark to read." -Groucho Marx

A child's life is like a piece of paper on which every passerby leaves a mark. -Chinese proverb

Blondesplosion! ~Deb

Mark Hoffmann

NaPoWriMo poets were amiss
no time for a snack or a piss.
They gathered catchy words
mainly pronouns and verbs
Writing humour is the hardest thing since sliced bread.

The Severed Hands of Oliver Olivovich
UK - https://www.amazon.co.uk/dp/B087SLGLSL
US - https://www.amazon.com/dp/B087ZN6L6V

FB Author Page - https://www.facebook.com/Mark-Hoffmann-Writer-102573844786590

Dylan di Vilde

NaPoWriMo poets were amiss
no time for a snack or a piss.
They gathered catchy words
mainly pronouns and verbs
but still produced rubbish like this.
Read more of my poems in my new book - Rescued from Oblivion.  Available now at https://www.feedaread.com/profiles/10661/