Raku (a villanelle)

Started by indar9, December 26, 2024, 04:32:32 PM

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indar9

Made of clay from tribal veins,
spun to form on potter's wheel
hardened in a pit of flames,

hieroglyphs recount the day;
the potter's touch, how did he feel
made of clay from tribal veins,

did an owl hoot, was there rain?
Each pot holds its history
hardened in a pit of flames.

Wild rice hulls from waterways
lend an iridescent sheen
made of clay from tribal veins.

Every pot holds perfect shape
of purest air from pines and streams
hardened in a pit of flames.

Wood and fire, rice and clay,
traditions from Anishinaabe
honored in these forms today,
made of clay from tribal veins
hardened in a pit of flames.

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Gyppo

Indar, you make these recognised 'forms' of poetry look easy.

indar9

Thanks Gyppo, I like doing them. It's kind of like a word game but sometimes something gets said. Unfortunately, there's not many places to go with poetry written to form. Fortunately, there are these online forums so I can visit mine upon the unsuspecting reader :)

skylightgreg

the form feels so organic because you give the motifs brand new contexts, from the potters kiln, to the spirit of the subject in the clay pot, and finally to the landscape which is of clay.

this one really hums!  i'm curious as to whether this is a new one, or a poem from a couple years ago. 

indar9

I am excavating poems I've written during Fives and NaPo challenges. Once the heat and fury is over, I tend to let them go by the wayside. Since I'm in a dry writing period, I'm editing a bit and reviving some of them. I think this is from a couple of years ago, yes. Thanks, Greg, for the read and your positive feedback.

Midnight candle

As Gyppo said. Another superb poem. Thanks for posting.
Looking from a different angle

indar9

Thank you MC. I mentioned on another of my poems written to a form here that I really love doing them. But what can anyone do with them other than post on an online forum? Skylightgreg has published a book of our poems (nonformal), Riding Waterfalls, free on Amazon--who knew? That gave me the idea of publishing an entire book of formal poetry with explanations of how each is constructed, the history and maybe some quirky comments about the joy of writing to form by the contributors. I'm in the middle of a big project so time won't allow for me to do it, but anyone can use my great idea :)

https://www.amazon.com/Riding-Waterfalls-Poetry-Collection-Gregory/dp/B0DNRC5N4K