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Success Stories / Re: Alien Exit
« on: July 12, 2020, 06:50:01 PM »
Best of luck, Geoff.

I have a few stories on KDP and have gotten very little traction. I'm not good at marketing and my sales show it.  :)

Writer's Talk / Re: Spare character arrives.
« on: June 11, 2020, 04:39:55 PM »
I don't think she has any violent tendencies.  But the mechanical aspects of gun making may well interest her.

Just keep the bullets hidden.

Ask a Question / Re: passive voice
« on: May 12, 2020, 09:43:10 PM »
Thanks, Emery.

I agree that READING is the best way to learn.
I also have online resources too.

Ask a Question / Re: passive voice
« on: May 06, 2020, 05:23:01 PM »
Thanks for the encouragement, Jo! I've been at this for years now, and finally, it looks like I'm making progress.   :)

Hi Deb, I don't like the heat. It's going to be 100 Fahrenheit today in Riverside. I grew up by the beach so I'm used to that kind of weather. Hopefully, I'll get back there someday.  :)

Ask a Question / Re: passive voice
« on: May 05, 2020, 08:53:53 PM »
Thank you Mark, Jo & Gyppo! I knew I came to the right place for some sound advice.

I'll use Grammarly with a grain of salt. A rewrite is always a good alternative. I can try including a subject to see if it "fits".

READING/READING/READING is what I value the most. It's hard for me because of my vision challenges, but I will try to do more. Since I come from an IT background I know the positives and negatives software brings. That should've been a big clue for me to begin with.

And I'm not shy when it comes to asking questions, Gyppo, so your advice is valued as well. You've all heard of the saying that "no such thing as a stupid question". I prefer the one that says "the only stupid question is the one that is never asked".

Thanks for the inspiration to do better!

Ask a Question / passive voice
« on: May 04, 2020, 10:52:15 PM »
I need your help.

I'm having problems with this sentence. Grammarly says it's "passive voice" but it sounds OK to me?

The sounds of emergency vehicles could be heard when the BMW’s gas tank rang out—BOOM!

When I change it to this then Grammarly says it's OK. I think this sounds good too.

The sounds of emergency vehicles were approaching when the BMW’s gas tank rang out—BOOM!

Could someone please explain why one is better, or more correct, than the other?

*NOTE: I've tested Grammarly and now I'm beginning to think its values are limited. I test with some text from established authors and it finds problems with theres too???

Ask a Question / Re: Is editing a never ending process?
« on: May 03, 2020, 10:33:00 PM »
 ;D ;D ;D

Thanks, Gyppo

I agree. I just tried Grammarly myself. It did find some errors (when I couldn't see the woods from the trees) but also screamed at "my style". I'm also looking into buying some "writing" books to help with my "show" instead of "tell" and also engage the Reader.

I'm still plugging away.

Ask a Question / Re: Is editing a never ending process?
« on: May 03, 2020, 08:38:00 PM »
Does anyone use editing tools like GRAMMARLY?

Ask a Question / Re: Is editing a never ending process?
« on: April 30, 2020, 06:00:00 PM »
I do it constantly to my little stories. Perhaps that's why I keep on getting rejections. Or, maybe I have other problems. I think they're pretty good, but my vote doesn't count.  :-[

The Bar & Grill / Re: BWF Bar and Grill
« on: April 12, 2020, 07:32:08 PM »
That's beautiful. Thanks for sharing.

Happy Easter, Mom, I love you!

The Bar & Grill / Re: BWF Bar and Grill
« on: April 10, 2020, 12:10:23 AM »
Thanks, Gyppo.

I usually have a few short stories in the mix.
One of my problems is there are lots of places to submit stories to, but I'm never quite sure if it fits. I do read some of their current content to see if it fits or not, and a lot of times I find out what they publish is a cut-above what I can write. Or maybe it's just their style from mine? Hmmm

I just wrote another noir (private dick) story and i'm finding they don't really "fit" in with a lot of sites I've found. I'm thinking now I'll put them together and publish them on Kindle.

The Bar & Grill / Re: BWF Bar and Grill
« on: April 09, 2020, 10:42:57 PM »
Take care of yourself, Deb. That truly sux!

BTW: With a couple of exceptions all I get are rejections. You'd think maybe I'd be used to it, but I'm not. The writing maybe short on style and craftsmanship (I do work hard on it), but my stories do have good twists at the end.

The Bar & Grill / Re: BWF Bar and Grill
« on: April 09, 2020, 04:50:06 PM »

I recently wrote a story about ants taking over and it's been rejected twice.  :(

I thought it was clever but no one else seems to think so.

It's all about the money, don't cha know? Unfortunately, it's what runs the world. Why? Because humans are involved.

Welcome - START HERE! / Re: Hi everyone
« on: March 30, 2020, 04:31:58 PM »
Back at you.  :)

Welcome aboard.

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