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Poet's Corner => Poet's Corner => Topic started by: DGSquared on September 01, 2021, 08:29:00 AM

Title: Obit **Caution**Language
Post by: DGSquared on September 01, 2021, 08:29:00 AM
       Obit


The old man will die soon,
he is no longer fighting.
He doesn't give a shit.

When the mean, old bastard
finally dies, there
will be no obit.

~Deb

Second draft:


Relative

The asshole will die soon,
he is no longer fighting.
He does not give a shit.

When the mean, old bastard
finally dies there
will be no obit.

~Deb

Edit:

Something to be said for not posting your writing after two cocktails, especially if you are emotional.  ::) :o ::)

It's not that we aren't willing to write an obituary for him, he simply doesn't want an one..