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Re: Anapaestic interchanges of the trimetric kind (strictly adults only)
« Reply #1650 on: February 17, 2022, 03:18:51 PM »
He put fifty-pence in her slot
her customers did that a lot
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« Reply #1651 on: February 17, 2022, 08:17:24 PM »
He put fifty-pence in her slot
her customers did that a lot
it used to be more

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« Reply #1652 on: February 18, 2022, 07:38:26 AM »
He put fifty-pence in her slot
her customers did that a lot
it used to be more
if you used the back door 
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« Reply #1653 on: February 18, 2022, 12:15:59 PM »
He put fifty-pence in her slot
her customers did that a lot
it used to be more
if you used the back door
now she doesn't mind who, where or what.
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« Reply #1654 on: February 19, 2022, 06:20:16 AM »
A wizard was playing pinball
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Re: Anapaestic interchanges of the trimetric kind (strictly adults only)
« Reply #1655 on: March 21, 2022, 02:59:41 AM »
A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
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« Reply #1656 on: March 21, 2022, 06:35:47 AM »
A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
which flipped off the bumpers

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« Reply #1657 on: March 22, 2022, 06:21:17 AM »
A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
which flipped off the bumpers
got snagged in his jumper

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Re: Anapaestic interchanges of the trimetric kind (strictly adults only)
« Reply #1658 on: April 04, 2022, 08:45:12 PM »
A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
which flipped off the bumpers
got snagged in his jumper
and caused the old codger to fall


I tried to think of something less boring but my muse has headed off to the wild, blue yonder.
"Outside of a dog, a book is man's best friend. Inside of a dog it's too dark to read." -Groucho Marx

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« Reply #1659 on: April 05, 2022, 08:38:27 AM »
A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
which flipped off the bumpers
got snagged in his jumper
and caused the old codger to fall


I tried to think of something less boring but my muse has headed off to the wild, blue yonder.

Yeah, but the metre is perfect and there's lovely consonance too.  :)



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Re: Anapaestic interchanges of the trimetric kind (strictly adults only)
« Reply #1660 on: April 06, 2022, 09:59:10 AM »
A wizard was playing pinball
when he got a long-distant call
which flipped off the bumpers
got snagged in his jumper
and caused the old codger to fall


I tried to think of something less boring but my muse has headed off to the wild, blue yonder.

Yeah, but the metre is perfect and there's lovely consonance too.  :)

Thanks, I think.  ;) :D

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Re: Anapaestic interchanges of the trimetric kind (strictly adults only)
« Reply #1661 on: April 07, 2022, 06:17:14 AM »
NaPoWriMo poets were amiss
no time for a snack or a piss.
Writing humour is the hardest thing since sliced bread.

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Re: Anapaestic interchanges of the trimetric kind (strictly adults only)
« Reply #1662 on: April 07, 2022, 06:37:12 AM »
NaPoWriMo poets were amiss
no time for a snack or a piss.
They gathered catchy words
"Outside of a dog, a book is man's best friend. Inside of a dog it's too dark to read." -Groucho Marx

A child’s life is like a piece of paper on which every passerby leaves a mark. -Chinese proverb

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« Reply #1663 on: April 08, 2022, 09:15:16 PM »
NaPoWriMo poets were amiss
no time for a snack or a piss.
They gathered catchy words
mainly pronouns and verbs
Writing humour is the hardest thing since sliced bread.

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« Reply #1664 on: April 10, 2022, 04:10:54 PM »
NaPoWriMo poets were amiss
no time for a snack or a piss.
They gathered catchy words
mainly pronouns and verbs
but still produced rubbish like this.
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